Friday, 30 March 2012

100 Word Challenge by Tobias

                                    the hunt

There was a Easter hunt at Thurlton park. It was a sunny day , then tim could see a chocolate rabbit melted in the sun . tim ran over “Ono he said” he picked it up and took it to his house. The man came and had a look at the chocolate bunny but it wasn't there. he said “Ono” .He ran back and said to evey one”sorry evey one there wont be a big surprise .1 2 3 gooooooooooo and all the children ran to find all the Easter eggs before any won get them.

The end

1 comment:

  1. Lovely!!
    What a wonderful imagination you have. Wish i could join you to find these eggs
    Just a small point to consider: make sure you always proof read your work out loud so you know it makes sense to the reader
    Well Done
    Mr Overton
    (100WC Team)

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